during World War 2, me and my fellow comrades were waiting for our general to come up with a conspiracy to attack the Nazi base. We were waiting for hours and hours, and still no plan. The general had gone into a small room where usually the other leaders would go to talk and make other plans, but this time he went in alone. He had then told us to wait outside while he worked silently in private, and later on, tell us his plan. We apprehended what he was trying to say and let him do his work.
A few moments later, one of my fellow comrades had gotten worried about our general taking a long time, and decided to go check on him, I too had gotten worried, so I followed him into the room. Inside the room was something that put me and my comrade both in the state of shock, it was a body lying on the middle of the room, the body of our leader.
We then decided to call on a medic. the medic came in the room and checked his body for about half an hour, and had told us that our leader had suffered a heart attack and was now dead. At first, we were all in the state of anarchy, and didn’t know what do to next without our general and his plan, but luckily, I had found the plan on top of the table, and surprisingly, it was finished. We then fought for our general in battle using the plan, and after a few months, we had won. at his funeral my comrades and I were all proud for having this wonderful man as our general.
Haha that was nice to read! I liked how instead of saying "some doctor came" you said "a medic" :). Going with the language of the time really makes more impact. I also like your word choice and story plot! Great!
ResponderExcluirNice job Daniel.
ResponderExcluirNo, it didn't happen, I just made it up.
ResponderExcluirGood job Daniel. It was very original and u cud imagine what was happening. Nice post.
ResponderExcluirHaha nice job Daniel, good story, good use of words. A bit of fantasy there but Great overall
ResponderExcluirDaniel you have a spelling mistake in the title, other than that it was a great job.
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